Writing Skills Workshop
October 25, 2014
Can Beauty Be Honest?
Two Types of Beautiful
Beauty is dishonest. Beauty is honest. You may be born beautiful and you may also construct yourself to be perceived as beautiful. Being born beautiful is honest beauty. Honest beauty is a naked face and body untouched by needles. Natural is the best word to describe honest beauty. Dishonest beauty is similar to construction. Fixing what someone thinks is not attractive. Examples including nose reconstruction, botox, impacts, and much more. Beauty can be both honest, and dishonest.
Babies are an example of honest beauty. Their faces untouched by any kind of makeup. As people get older they find that in the world we live in today their is a lot of constructed beauty. Everyone is wearing makeup. Many people are getting "work done" on their faces and bodies. Honest beauty is very hard to come by. The worlds expectations of beauty are high. Most people wish that instead of being their beautiful selfs to be a barbie.
"The first ten years of a girls life is spent playing with Barbies and the next ten years are spent trying to look like one". This quote is very similar to dishonest, or constructed beauty. Women do whatever it takes to be seen as beautiful in the eyes of others. The construction of beauty can not be honest. It is altering your appearance. For example, makeup is dishonest. Makeup is meant to alter your appearance to make you look better but when the makeup is removed you're a different person. I'm not implying that women who wear makeup are not beautiful. I am simply saying that if a person appears differently with makeup on then without than they are considered a dishonest beauty.
The video below is a video from Ted Talks. This one in particular a model named Cameron Russel. Her career is to pose as a model for what beautiful looks like. She explains the pictures they take of her are not her but something someone has constructed. Hair, makeup, wardrobe, all play parts in the efforts to create the perfect girl. A picture of before she had even reached her menstrual cycle really shows how they had constructed the picture in the magazine to MAKE her look beautiful, older and sexy. The girl in the pictures is a constructed beauty. Cameron Russell is a beautiful woman. She is a naturally beautiful person but the worlds standards are higher than her natural honest beauty. So the media has created a new beauty, that isn't Cameron, that is almost impossible to reach without making changes to your natural appearance.
Babies are an example of honest beauty. Their faces untouched by any kind of makeup. As people get older they find that in the world we live in today their is a lot of constructed beauty. Everyone is wearing makeup. Many people are getting "work done" on their faces and bodies. Honest beauty is very hard to come by. The worlds expectations of beauty are high. Most people wish that instead of being their beautiful selfs to be a barbie. "The first ten years of a girls life is spent playing with Barbies and the next ten years are spent trying to look like one". This quote is very similar to dishonest, or constructed beauty. Women do whatever it takes to be seen as beautiful in the eyes of others. The construction of beauty can not be honest. It is altering your appearance. For example, makeup is dishonest. Makeup is meant to alter your appearance to make you look better but when the makeup is removed you're a different person. I'm not implying that women who wear makeup are not beautiful. I am simply saying that if a person appears differently with makeup on then without than they are considered a dishonest beauty. The video below is a video from Ted Talks. This one in particular a model named Cameron Russel. Her career is to pose as a model for what beautiful looks like. She explains the pictures they take of her are not her but something someone has constructed. Hair, makeup, wardrobe, all play parts in the efforts to create the perfect girl. A picture of before she had even reached her menstrual cycle really shows how they had constructed the picture in the magazine to MAKE her look beautiful, older and sexy. The girl in the pictures is a constructed beauty. Cameron Russell is a beautiful woman. She is a naturally beautiful person but the worlds standards are higher than her natural honest beauty. So the media has created a new beauty, that isn't Cameron, that is almost impossible to reach without making changes to your natural appearance.
Jodie, I'm going to use this exercise to help you with your sentence structure errors:
ReplyDelete1) Examples including nose reconstruction, botox, impacts, and much more. (What type of sentence structure error is this?)
2) Their faces untouched by any kind of makeup. (What type of sentence structure error is this? Fix it.)
3) This is not a sentence structure error, but you have an error in this sentence: As people get older they find that in the world we live in today their is a lot of constructed beauty. (What is it? Fix it.)
4) This is not a sentence structure error, but you have an error within this sentence: The worlds expectations of beauty are high. (Find and fix it).
5). Clarity. What do you mean by this: Most people wish that instead of being their beautiful selfs to be a barbie.
6). Remove all the "you" from your paper. I don't know who you're talking about.
7) Use transitions throughout your paragraph and between paragraphs to connect your ideas.
These are your patterns of error Jodie. If you want to get an A in this course you must master how to avoid making sentence structure errors. When you see this notation [ ] around a group of words in your paper, chances are you have created a fragment. You must fix it.
Do my comments make sense? Please respond.